Good job with your storybook so far! I really love Greek Mythology so I am really interested to see how your storybook turns out. I really like the color scheme and font that you chose. It seems very royal, which is very fitting for a queen, I am really glad you decided to make it to where Persephone is really happy with Hades. I know there are versions out there where she is not as happy and, like her mother, longs for a way out of the underworld.
I know pictures can be difficult to find at times, but I suggest you find a different picture. The one on your cover page looks old, but still grabs your attention because of the history. The one in your introduction I honestly would not know it was Persephone if you didn't tell me. Maybe look for a picture of Persephone and Hades for either that page or a future page? Also I think you need a comma in "seen it all, heard it all and know it all," after the all in "heard it all."
I am really excited to hear everything from Persephone's point of view and cannot wait to hear more from your storybook!
The theme you used was very fitting for Hades and Persephone. Red and gold seem very regal and have a fire like appearance which is also associated with hell and Hades. I think it might be better to find a different picture that goes with the light hearted attitude of the stories you are telling.
I liked your fresh take on the story of Persephone. I enjoyed the twist on the story that you implemented. Hades is never seen in a positive light and it is entertaining to see what a person would have to be like in order to like Hades. I will be interested to see if the stories you tell will show a gradual change in her behavior over time or if she is consistent with how she feels about Hades for the entire time.
I also really liked the diary format of the stories you will tell. It will be interesting to see if her attitude about Hades changes throughout the stories. I noticed that the diary of the abduction shows a more traditional view whereas in the introduction she has a much more positive outlook on her situation.
Good job! I look forward to reading the rest of your stories!
Jessica, I read the story of Demeter and Persephone when I was in the sixth grade, and I think this is the tale that got me really interested in Greek mythology. When I read it, however, it definitely framed Hades in a terrible light, portraying him as an evil being who held Persephone in the underworld against her will. This is the notion I always had with her story, and it was really surprising and refreshing to read another perspective, other than the one that is "riddled with lies and misconceptions." The fact that you did this added a whole new element of creativity!
It was very interesting that you showed Persephone's frustration at her mother for keeping her sheltered and locked up. This certainly isn't something that is conveyed in the original myth. It was also kind of funny to me that she had some teenage angst and that her intentions for staying were almost an act of rebellion.
I had no idea that the Abduction of Persephone was a disputed account; I had only ever read one version of the story and took that to be true. Overall, I thought you did a great job shedding different light on the subject and framing it in a new point of view.
Hey Jessica! First off I want to say that I really like the color scheme that you chose to go with for your google sites page! The red fits in perfectly with the theme of Persephone and Hades in the underworld! I also really like the picture that you chose. It makes me think that you are going to go with a more classical approach to the story versus something more modern.
I thought that your introduction was wonderful and the picture you used is stunning! One thing that I would change in the opening paragraph, however, is your usage of the phrases, “Maybe you’ve heard,” and, “I’m sure you’ve heard.” Maybe considering changing one of those into a different verb in replace of heard may make the paragraph a little smoother. I also noticed a slight type in your third paragraph where you put the words “my own” together on accident. Since your introduction was so entertaining, I had to get nit picky in order to find something that I thought needed a touch of work! I love that you have set up the story for Persephone to be in a place of control and power instead of the weak helpless wife of Hades we are used to seeing.
I commented about your storybook last week and I chose to come back to you for my extra this week because I wanted to know more about your story. So, good job! You made me want to come back and read more! I think that having Persephone share her diary is a great way to tell this story. I love how you get to follow Persephone's journey as she falls in love with her bad boy. Well the way she describes him makes him seem just a bit misunderstood even though he might look like a punk. I like how you incorporated Demeter. She definitely plays the part of the overprotective, sometimes smothering, but always loving mother very well. I definitely sympathize with Persephone. She is loving her new power of being queen and being with Hades, but she is homesick. She is in a new land and is probably a little scared of the future she has in the Underworld. From what I have read, the Underworld does not sound like the happiest place. She also doesn't have the choice of backing out of it. I guess that is her payment for eating the seeds. It is kind of like a "forbidden fruit" scenario. Good job this week! I will definitely check in later to see more of your storybook!
FRom reading your intro I have one thing to say. What do you mean there are thing on the internet that aren't true? I read on the internet that they can't put anything on there that wasn't true! Haha, I'm just kidding I promise. Any way, I really enjoyed your intro! It intrigued me and made me want to figure out what the lies and misconstrued stories were as well as what the real stories should be! I can't wait to see what stories you are going to retell as well as how you tell them.
I find it interesting how your title of your first story is "myth" of abduction. I know that you are retelling the lies about Persephone, so the title makes sense, I just wanted to point out that I liked it! I like how your diary skips days, it makes it seem more real, but in day 11 I noticed a few little things. So she has only been in the Underworld for less than a day probably but she is talking about how everyday there is something new, how Hades is always surprising her and keeping her on her toes, and other things that would take longer than just several hours to notice. And in day 25 she says she had only eaten pomegranate seeds while she was down there but in an earlier entry she says that the food was delicious, as if she had eaten more than just the seeds. It is also weird because she is only 14... Other that that, I really do enjoy how you break up the entries and I really like how you tell the stories. I feel like I can relate to how she is feeling sometimes, or how her mother would be feeling. I look forward to reading more in the future, just maybe try to pay attention to discrepancies like those?
Your cover page for your Persephone page is very simple and well done. The picture of the old pot etched with Persephone and Hades is really cool. The font for the title and the headers fits now that I know that this is in the form of a diary, but the gray is just a little difficult to see on the beige background at the top. I know that red is not only for love but passion in general (hate, murder, devil, etc.), so it definitely gives this more of traditional love story feeling instead of the angst teenager (or maybe even emo) that you may be going for.
I think the introduction was very well written, and the and the picture you picked for this page really sets the right tone for the story. Doing it as a diary is a great twist because I have only ever heard the story told from Demeter's point of view, and I have always thought that she was being very dramatic. I mean, I understand that this is just a myth about why there is a winter, but she is still just so overprotective.
The first page of diary entries was really interesting because it does sound like a 14 year old girl, but she is talking about how she basically is getting married to Hades and is alright with it even though her mom is horrified. It fits the situation perfectly. Since this is a diary though, I would expect to see more gushy 14 year old stuff about how tall and cool he is or how he seems so sensitive and lonely and he only needs someone to love him. Her understanding of why Hades is needed to cause evil in the world is a little creepy.
Jessica, as soon as I saw your storybook title I had to find out more! Overall I love the look of your color scheme because the golds and reds really make me think of the underworld. It reminds me of fire! The grey is a little harder to notice in the borders but I do appreciate in on the gold and red. Good job matching a fantastic photo for the coverpage to the overall scheme of things.
Your introduction starts off beautifully by capturing my attention. The photo for this page is perfect because it makes me think of Persephone reaching up to the earth. The idea of the underworld not being a bad place is an interesting plot twist and the idea of Hades being a powerful leader is interesting as well. This is very well written!
I feel as if I can really understand her point of view with the diary layout. You write in a way that really brings her personality out. I definitely agree that this seems like she has a much more adult mindset and I think adding some lusty details might be interesting. I feel like since you wanted to portray her as a diva, you could really portray her a little bit more fierce in her desires for Hades and a not so boring life. I definitely felt the sass in her personality though!
Overall very good! I am looking forward to reading more and I will definitely come back to visit your next stories!
Your introduction was amazing! You have such strong voice and flow in it, I really felt as though I was listening to Persephone. What I really love about it the underlying emotions of Persephone you have captured. She is tired of people, and other gods, not understanding her and just completely not getting it. It seems as though someone pushed her a little too far and she is speaking out. I always find memoir ideas like this to be so powerful because the person is telling it how it is, at least from their perspective, and we really never give people the benefit of the doubt because of what we believe they should feel and do and want. The diary style in your first story is excellent for breaking up the stories so they do not drone on. I especially like how the diary entries were not done consecutively, this makes it so much more realistic to life because no one actually writes in a diary, or journal, every single day. I found this story to be so incredibly cute. It was very cute and hilarious. Something I find to be very important in stories like this are the little unimportant details that happen in our everyday lives, like eating a pomegranate. Great work on these stories!
This storybook has a very similar theme to mine so it was great to see what someone else was doing about the same project! I really like the picture you used for your home page! It looks like Persephone is in distress, but that makes sense she was forced to the underworld and I think this picture shows a lot of the appropriate emotions.
Moving to the introduction, wow! This took me by complete surprise because I did not expect this to be a happy story whatsoever. I think you put a very unique spin on the life of Persephone and her feelings about her situation. Now I’m really excited to read the story!
Another unique turn of events! A diary is a great way to portray the life of the storyteller/main character and I like how you started entries well before she goes to the underworld with Hades. Once again, you take a very unique stance portraying the underworld as an enjoyable place for her to live, even with great food! I suppose she is a queen though so it would make sense that she’s treated like one. I think you do a very good job of giving Persephone voice and attitude and I’m very curious to see what the next story holds!
I just wanted to thank you for your comment on my Storybook Project! Your comment was not only flattering but extremely helpful. I am so glad you enjoyed my template and theme I chose. I have a lot of experience watching E! News and I'm pleased to know I am portraying the dialogue properly! Thank you again!
Hey Jessica, I just wanted to say thank you for your comment on my storytelling for the first week. You were one of two people that said they liked that I added my hometown to the story. I appreciate the feedback!
I just wanted to stop by and thank you for leaving such a great comment on my portfolio post! I really appreciate that you saw that I wanted to change some things up in my version of retelling the story. I think that it is important to sometimes branch away from the original story and to make it your own. Again thanks for the great comment!
Hi Jessica! I loved reading your storybook! I'm from the Epics of India class, so it was wonderful to see other types of storybook projects. Your project is really great! I love first person narratives because the author becomes someone else, and you did that really well! She is quite the dramatic queen! It was great to learn about a character I didn’t know much about. I also loved the design of your project; for mine, I used the same layout, so I'm a little biased towards it. It worked really well with your theme—it was moody and a little dark like the Underworld. One little technical suggestion for your project: maybe don’t make "god" capitalized. Usually it's only used when referring to the Christian "God", like "Allah" in Islam is often capitalized. Usually mythological gods aren't capitalized. Your introduction is powerful, and I really liked the image you chose. So powerful and beautiful! You did a really good job showing her transformation from a naive girl blocked from the world to a powerful, influential queen. Your author’s note was really helpful in illuminating the different perspectives of the story and how the versions differed from yours. Great job!
Thanks Jessica, for your feedback on my story telling last week. Yes the relationship between the monkey and the shark is weird. Good luck with this semester
Hi Jessica! I really liked your introduction and first story when I read them a week or two ago and your theme is very close to mine, so I thought I'd read your storybook as my free choice this week to see what the next story you added was.
This story did an incredible job of giving Persephone emotion and character, which is a good continuation from your first story. The tale of Orpheus and Eurydice is not one I got to read during the first few weeks of class, or one I have ever heard of actually. It definitely ended differently than I expected, but was very well told. The amount of detail you give is very impressive and you placed a very clear setting into my head as I was reading.
Even though Hades isn’t a part a big part of the story you still did good to give him some emotion and character as well by providing his reactions a few different times. You also did good to continue a few themes from your introduction and first story, such as Persephone trying to displace the “rumors” that most people have about the underworld.
The picture you found for this is amazing. I often have a very hard time finding a picture that I like to go with the Greek mythology stories, but you nailed this one. I really like how this story is coming along and I am eager to see what the next story you choose is!
Hi Jessica! I’m glad you chose to tell the story of Persephone. I find the story of Persephone and Hades to be one of the more interesting ones. I think your storybook layout and cover photo are very eye-catching and fitting for your story. The introduction did a good job of explaining what will further be explained in the story. I like how you’re going to be telling it from the point of view of Persephone so we’ll feel more connected to her. Writing in diary style really helps the audience have a peak into the mind of the narrator. The way you write it definitely makes it known that Persephone is only 14 and quite naïve still. As the diary submissions slow progress, it seems like Persephone really doesn’t know what to feel. She’s so young so she really has no idea what’s going on and what’s really going to happen. Something I think that would make her diary entries more relatable. Is if she described things more in detail. That way not only can we relate to what she’s feeling but also visual things that she’s visualizing. Other than that I really enjoyed your story. I look forward to reading more soon!
I love love love the story of Persephone and Hades! Greek Mythology FTW! It is definitely one of my favorite stories!
I wanted to start off by commenting on your cover page. I really like the bold red color you have chosen for your background! It seems to me it is a great color for her royalty the Queen of the Underworld! Haha. I also really liked the image you included on your cover page! It really gets the tone of classic greek mythology set into your story on the first glance... nice choice!
Next, your introduction was pretty great! I loved this new perspective for Persephone. In the original story she is portrayed as this poor girl who is trapped in the underworld against her will, but you are RIGHT! She is a queen down there and I hope she likes it! Just from your introduction I can tell the sass this queen is giving off will make some great stories!
Your first story was super! My heart-strings really started pulling for Persephone when I found out she was going to have to go back to the underworld, but I feel better now that she realizes that it is not all that bad. I feel bad for her situation though. I think you did a really great job retelling this story!
So I chose your storybook to read for my free choice. I read your intro and first story a while ago and I really liked it! I am very glad I decided to go back and read yours again! I really like your idea of telling what the Underworld is really like based on Persephone's point of view. It makes things seem more real!
One thing I noticed, and I have no idea whether or not you did this on purpose but I definitely enjoyed it, was that in the second story, you did not use a diary format. I like this because it makes me feel like Persephone has grown up since we first read what she was going through. Also how you wrote her opinions and recounting of the story gives me a visual of a much more mature, grown up queen. Not a love-struck child. I love your story and I can't wait to come back and read more!
The colors, text, and image of your cover page blend really well together. I have come across some tales of Persephone while researching Greek mythology for storybook possibilities. The most that I know is how she was stolen, by Hades, from her mother and I am excited begin reading your project to learn more!
The perspective that you present through Persephone is one that most do not expect, and I enjoyed this component a lot! I like her personality and how she is sure of what she wants, despite what her mother wishes for her. I have always liked the diary style of writing since it gives readers more insight on the narrators emotions and thoughts.
Wow, I did not know that Winter time was inspired by the abduction of Persephone (per the Romans/Greeks of course)! I like how in your story she is open to new beginnings and experiences. I do feel bad for Demeter, but she can almost blame herself for hiding away her daughter in solitude. I did learn some new facts in your author's note, and I think it is interesting that Persephone spends two thirds of her time away from her husband. Good job on your project so far, I cannot wait to return to read more of your work!
Hi Jessica! Wow I really like the theme for your storybook! I thought that the color scheme of your format and the picture on your cover page work really well with the theme. Your intro was very powerful which I liked! It kept me interested and wanting to know what was next. I loved that for your first story you did the diary style of writing. I have not read a storybook or portfolio with that style thus far. I think thats a fun way to do it because it is like little mini stories that you can read very easily and there is not too much extra bulk within the story. It was also nice to read a story from the main character's point of view for once because that is not usually the case. I love greek mythology which is why I took this class so I am glad that I am finally reading a storybook about that as well. I did not know any stories, prior to this storybook, about Hades or Persephone. So that was nice for me because I love learning about all of the gods and goddesses. You did a really great job with this and I think your finished project is going to be awesome! I can't wait to see how it turns out in the end. Good luck!
I really like how you added the personality to Persephone (Try saying that 5x and fast, haha). You gave her a bit of sass and royal snooty-ness. I found it quite humorous. Your introduction is good. It is interesting and draws readers in. I noticed in your third paragraph a small grammatical error. Instead of “myown,” it should be “my own.”
For your first story, I would suggest instead of marking each diary with Day 1, Day 7, etc. to change it to actual dates like November 1, November 7, etc. I think that would add a nice touch to your story. Other than that, it is a great story. You made a smart choice in having the abduction of Persephone in your first story because I’m not sure if everyone knows the story of Persephone.
After reading your first story, an idea came to mind. What if your introduction was kind of like a “My Cribs” episode off of MTV? Like Persephone is showing off her home in the Underworld. Maybe her diary could be somewhere in her room. Then since your second story is about Orpheus, it could be when readers move to her throne room. It is just a thought that came to my head that I wanted to mention to you. Great work on your storybook! Keep it up!
Jessica, I’ve enjoyed your storybook so far, so I’m back again this week!
This was a perfect choice for your storybook. Personally, I’ve never heard this myth but the way it fit into your theme was great. Once again, you did a great job giving Persephone character and a strong voice throughout the story and seeing your storybook come together week by week has been fun. The Greek myths definitely have a healthy amount of strange things that happen, including incest. Most of Zeus’s children come from rape so anything is possible and I bet your hunch about the love for Adonis being desire rather than maternal is probably correct.
I think the thing you did best while retelling this story is showing the increasing amount of care Persephone has for Adonis after she discovers him. In the beginning she mentions how she isn’t exactly the motherly type and by the end she is obsessed with the child and you show that transformation very well through your writing.
It definitely seems like the gods do nothing but quarrel with each other and pass their dirty work onto someone else! I also found it interesting that Persephone seems to “move on” pretty easily after the decision by Zeus. She has grown attached to Adonis and now only gets to see him a third of the time, maybe Persephone is just that cold!
Hey Jessica! I decided I would come and check out your story again! You have added two stories since I last read so I am really looking forward to see what you have done with it!
First off, I really enjoy the new picture you have for your introduction. It is definitely more visually appealing than the original picture.
I really liked your second story "Favor for Orpheus." I love how you make the reader realize that Persephone has seen her fair share of souls in the Underworld. A person would have to be pretty special to be remembered in that place. Describing Eurydice as "distraught, confused and looking spooked, which is how most people come to the Underworld" was brilliant. I like how you described not only Eurydice, but most souls that come into the Underworld. All of those feelings are definitely understandable considering you are dead. I guess you need time to mourn your own death. I really feel bad for Orpheus in the end. He went through all that trouble and his curiosity really gets the best of him. I think this story is great because you really get to see the way that Queen Persephone ruled the Underworld in the beginning of her reign.
I love that Persephone got the chance to be motherly. I had honestly never heard of Adonis's story before I read this and am really intrigued by it. I would like to believe that Persephone loved Adonis based off of more than just his looks. She doesn't seem that vain. I really do not understand why Zeus would like to spend 1/3 of the year with him. Maybe I would get a better grasp on that if I read the original story.
Good job so far Jessica! I am really looking forward to seeing how your storybook will end up.
Hi, Jessica! I chose your storybook for my extra this week. I love Greek mythology. I’m doing some Greek myths for my storybook as well and Demeter and Persephone are going to be part of my fourth story. I love the theme you chose. It’s very fitting for the storybook’s concept.
Your introduction is great. It’s very well written and it really drew me in to continue reading. Your introduction also sets up the rest of your storybook well. I love the idea of Persephone narrating the stories. The picture on your introduction is perfect. I like how you worked the short diary entries for the first story. They really encompass the wide range of emotions that Persephone goes through as her life changes again and again. I also liked how you kept the ending hopeful for her future. That was a good transition into the next story.
The second story was also great. I loved the narrative. You did a great job with description. I could really picture the scene and Persephone’s emotions really showed. I liked the background you gave, like her being younger and less used to ruling, which is why she tried to make an exception.
I don’t think I’d heard the third story before. I liked the emphasis you put on the child’s beauty. It really showed that while Aphrodite and Persephone perhaps did care for the child, it was more infatuation than real maternal love. I’m glad you kept your story as maternal love instead of romantic love, as your author’s note said some stories seemed to insinuate. There was only one typo I saw in this story. In the second line, I think you need “placed IN my care by Aphrodite.” Great job! I look forward to seeing how your storybook ends!
You do a great job giving Persephone a really strong and distinctive voice. I especially liked your introduction and how you establish Persephone as somewhat of an apologist for Hades and the Underworld, saying things like how the King of the Underworld only “brings light to the dark in everyone.” Her viewpoint on the idea of embracing one’s dark side supplies a very morally grey vibe to her character, which I think is really cool. I also like how you’ve established a character arc throughout the stories by showing Persephone’s transformation from a naïve girl into the powerful pragmatist and self-assured ruler that is shown in the introduction. “Favor for Orpheus” stood out to me since it shows Persephone as a younger queen who still hasn’t completely numbed her heart to the necessary degree needed to be queen of the Underworld. Thus the second story can be said to be ultimately about Persephone learning to properly distance herself from the emotions that inhibit her ability as a ruler. By the end of “Adonis My Love,” we can see that she has begun to lose some of that sentimentality since she is only sad for a short time after losing Adonis. This is really sharp and well-paced character development that to me is your storybook’s strongest point along with Persephone’s awesome narrative voice. Amazing job, Jessica!
Jessica, first off - I really like the colors and theme of your storybook! The elegant fonts and red and gold colors really set the right theme for Persephone. I also really love your introduction and the way you set up the layout to have the picture at the top and integrated into the font.
As far as your introduction, I think you did a good job using a personal tone by telling the story from Persephone's perspective. You set up who the characters were and what the misconceptions might be which made me interested to read more into the background info and stories.
For your story, I read Adonis and I thought you told it really well! The story line was interesting and I like that you added personal elements like Persephone's emotions or internal thoughts - that was a good touch! Also, I found the maternal love to be slightly more than that (which you described in your Author's Note), which made the story kind of interesting.
The only suggestion I might make is that Ardonis' death, as well as his kind of separation from Persephone after his death in the Underworld, all happened kind of quickly. Maybe if there was a little more depth and insight into why he died, Persephone's emotions about it (because she seemed to be completely unfazed by it), or why there relationship faded. I know you kind of hit on it in the Author's Note, but it would be great to have more detail/explanation in the story.
Other than that, I think you have done great so far!
Hey Jessica! I remember having the chance to look at you storybook in it's very early stages, so I am excited that I get the opportunity this week to revisit your story and see how it has progressed! I can recall thinking that your theme was very interesting, so I am glad that I get to dive in and read through your new additions!
For your first story I loved that you gave us a more personal look at Persephone's character. Many mythological stories only give names to their characters and leave out what type of person they are. I think that it is really neat that you gave Persephone such a strong will and less of a victim.
For your second story, I again really like Persephone's character! She may be strong willed, but she is still imperfect and subject to mistake. What makes this story great is that she chooses to take this misfortune as an opportunity to learn and grow from it!
In your final story I am very glad that you chose to get Persephone a motherly adoration of the child versus a sexual one. Like you said, stranger things have happened in myths, but I am glad you made this one far more appropriate!
Great job overall! I really enjoyed reading your work!
Hi Jessica! I decided to come back to your storybook because I was so intrigued by what I read the first time. There has certainly been a lot more work done since I last visited, so I'm very excited to read more.
Like I mentioned before, I love that you're putting a new spin on the original story of Persephone. Instead of casting her as a helpless, "damsel in distress"-type of person, you give her life and a personality. The second story, Favor for Orpheus, shows this. Here, the reader can see that Persephone is not a one-dimensional character. It is interesting to read about the progression of her personality as she spends more and more time in the Underworld: she begins as a naive child, and as she encounters death every day, her heart becomes more desensitized to the pain and grief. This doesn't necessarily completely turn her into a bad person, but you really show both sides of her in the story about Orpheus: his grief for his wife is so powerful that it affects even the queen, but she states that her "mercy was revoked" and her "generosity was wasted" simply because of a minor mistake.
You display Persephone's sweetness again with her love for Adonis. It was so touching to see her fall in love with this child, and I really appreciated that it was a motherly love rather than a romantic one. As you mentioned in this story, the relationships in Greek mythology can be a little confusing, but it was sweet to watch this kind of love.
I really enjoyed reading your updated storybook! Great job!
I have read your other stories and always love how you write! I can imagine the great Queen of the Underworld chilling in a big cushy seat, snackin' on grapes and telling her stories to ghosts to entertain herself and pass the time. The story of Persephone and Adonis is one I actually know so I really enjoyed your retelling of it! And I was laughing through a lot of it! I love stories that can make me genuinely laugh! And when Aphrodite came back for Adonis I was like OOOOOOOHHHHHH!!!!!! It's about to go down in the Underworld!!! I got very excited. :) I think you did an excellent job of retelling this story and working it into your theme. Wonderful job! At some point I will come back and read the rest of yours!
Also, I forgot to mention, I always really like the pictures you use in your stories. I know you said that the Adonis one was the best you could do, but I really like it and think it works quite well! I also don't remember the part where Adonis was locked in the chest, but it has also been a while since I read this story. Again, wonderful job and I can't wait to have time to come back and read the rest!
"The first time I saw her I hated her immediately." Great, now I am laughing too hard to read the rest of the story... I just love how you write Persephone! I get such a great sense of her character and it is so consistent. I love sassy characters so much. Probably because I can relate with them so well... I am also really impressed with how well you transformed your story. I haven't read the original and so I totally thought that the dinner part was something from the original story. Again, I just love how you write your characters! Hades doesn't seem like such a horrible guy. Just one that is actually run by his wife, which I find hilarious. The God of the Underworld is not really in charge, but his dearly beloved wife. I really loved following your storybook this semester and I wish you the best of luck in your next semester!
Jessica, Thank you for your comment regarding my storybook. I'm glad you enjoyed the theme I followed throughout my storybook. Thanks for the encouragement!
Hey Jessica,
ReplyDeleteGood job with your storybook so far! I really love Greek Mythology so I am really interested to see how your storybook turns out. I really like the color scheme and font that you chose. It seems very royal, which is very fitting for a queen, I am really glad you decided to make it to where Persephone is really happy with Hades. I know there are versions out there where she is not as happy and, like her mother, longs for a way out of the underworld.
I know pictures can be difficult to find at times, but I suggest you find a different picture. The one on your cover page looks old, but still grabs your attention because of the history. The one in your introduction I honestly would not know it was Persephone if you didn't tell me. Maybe look for a picture of Persephone and Hades for either that page or a future page? Also I think you need a comma in "seen it all, heard it all and know it all," after the all in "heard it all."
I am really excited to hear everything from Persephone's point of view and cannot wait to hear more from your storybook!
The theme you used was very fitting for Hades and Persephone. Red and gold seem very regal and have a fire like appearance which is also associated with hell and Hades. I think it might be better to find a different picture that goes with the light hearted attitude of the stories you are telling.
ReplyDeleteI liked your fresh take on the story of Persephone. I enjoyed the twist on the story that you implemented. Hades is never seen in a positive light and it is entertaining to see what a person would have to be like in order to like Hades. I will be interested to see if the stories you tell will show a gradual change in her behavior over time or if she is consistent with how she feels about Hades for the entire time.
I also really liked the diary format of the stories you will tell. It will be interesting to see if her attitude about Hades changes throughout the stories. I noticed that the diary of the abduction shows a more traditional view whereas in the introduction she has a much more positive outlook on her situation.
Good job! I look forward to reading the rest of your stories!
Jessica, I read the story of Demeter and Persephone when I was in the sixth grade, and I think this is the tale that got me really interested in Greek mythology. When I read it, however, it definitely framed Hades in a terrible light, portraying him as an evil being who held Persephone in the underworld against her will. This is the notion I always had with her story, and it was really surprising and refreshing to read another perspective, other than the one that is "riddled with lies and misconceptions." The fact that you did this added a whole new element of creativity!
ReplyDeleteIt was very interesting that you showed Persephone's frustration at her mother for keeping her sheltered and locked up. This certainly isn't something that is conveyed in the original myth. It was also kind of funny to me that she had some teenage angst and that her intentions for staying were almost an act of rebellion.
I had no idea that the Abduction of Persephone was a disputed account; I had only ever read one version of the story and took that to be true. Overall, I thought you did a great job shedding different light on the subject and framing it in a new point of view.
Hey Jessica! First off I want to say that I really like the color scheme that you chose to go with for your google sites page! The red fits in perfectly with the theme of Persephone and Hades in the underworld! I also really like the picture that you chose. It makes me think that you are going to go with a more classical approach to the story versus something more modern.
ReplyDeleteI thought that your introduction was wonderful and the picture you used is stunning! One thing that I would change in the opening paragraph, however, is your usage of the phrases, “Maybe you’ve heard,” and, “I’m sure you’ve heard.” Maybe considering changing one of those into a different verb in replace of heard may make the paragraph a little smoother. I also noticed a slight type in your third paragraph where you put the words “my own” together on accident. Since your introduction was so entertaining, I had to get nit picky in order to find something that I thought needed a touch of work! I love that you have set up the story for Persephone to be in a place of control and power instead of the weak helpless wife of Hades we are used to seeing.
Great job!
Hey Jessica,
ReplyDeleteI commented about your storybook last week and I chose to come back to you for my extra this week because I wanted to know more about your story. So, good job! You made me want to come back and read more! I think that having Persephone share her diary is a great way to tell this story. I love how you get to follow Persephone's journey as she falls in love with her bad boy. Well the way she describes him makes him seem just a bit misunderstood even though he might look like a punk. I like how you incorporated Demeter. She definitely plays the part of the overprotective, sometimes smothering, but always loving mother very well. I definitely sympathize with Persephone. She is loving her new power of being queen and being with Hades, but she is homesick. She is in a new land and is probably a little scared of the future she has in the Underworld. From what I have read, the Underworld does not sound like the happiest place. She also doesn't have the choice of backing out of it. I guess that is her payment for eating the seeds. It is kind of like a "forbidden fruit" scenario. Good job this week! I will definitely check in later to see more of your storybook!
FRom reading your intro I have one thing to say. What do you mean there are thing on the internet that aren't true? I read on the internet that they can't put anything on there that wasn't true! Haha, I'm just kidding I promise. Any way, I really enjoyed your intro! It intrigued me and made me want to figure out what the lies and misconstrued stories were as well as what the real stories should be! I can't wait to see what stories you are going to retell as well as how you tell them.
ReplyDeleteI find it interesting how your title of your first story is "myth" of abduction. I know that you are retelling the lies about Persephone, so the title makes sense, I just wanted to point out that I liked it! I like how your diary skips days, it makes it seem more real, but in day 11 I noticed a few little things. So she has only been in the Underworld for less than a day probably but she is talking about how everyday there is something new, how Hades is always surprising her and keeping her on her toes, and other things that would take longer than just several hours to notice. And in day 25 she says she had only eaten pomegranate seeds while she was down there but in an earlier entry she says that the food was delicious, as if she had eaten more than just the seeds. It is also weird because she is only 14... Other that that, I really do enjoy how you break up the entries and I really like how you tell the stories. I feel like I can relate to how she is feeling sometimes, or how her mother would be feeling. I look forward to reading more in the future, just maybe try to pay attention to discrepancies like those?
Your cover page for your Persephone page is very simple and well done. The picture of the old pot etched with Persephone and Hades is really cool. The font for the title and the headers fits now that I know that this is in the form of a diary, but the gray is just a little difficult to see on the beige background at the top. I know that red is not only for love but passion in general (hate, murder, devil, etc.), so it definitely gives this more of traditional love story feeling instead of the angst teenager (or maybe even emo) that you may be going for.
ReplyDeleteI think the introduction was very well written, and the and the picture you picked for this page really sets the right tone for the story. Doing it as a diary is a great twist because I have only ever heard the story told from Demeter's point of view, and I have always thought that she was being very dramatic. I mean, I understand that this is just a myth about why there is a winter, but she is still just so overprotective.
The first page of diary entries was really interesting because it does sound like a 14 year old girl, but she is talking about how she basically is getting married to Hades and is alright with it even though her mom is horrified. It fits the situation perfectly. Since this is a diary though, I would expect to see more gushy 14 year old stuff about how tall and cool he is or how he seems so sensitive and lonely and he only needs someone to love him. Her understanding of why Hades is needed to cause evil in the world is a little creepy.
Jessica, as soon as I saw your storybook title I had to find out more! Overall I love the look of your color scheme because the golds and reds really make me think of the underworld. It reminds me of fire! The grey is a little harder to notice in the borders but I do appreciate in on the gold and red. Good job matching a fantastic photo for the coverpage to the overall scheme of things.
ReplyDeleteYour introduction starts off beautifully by capturing my attention. The photo for this page is perfect because it makes me think of Persephone reaching up to the earth. The idea of the underworld not being a bad place is an interesting plot twist and the idea of Hades being a powerful leader is interesting as well. This is very well written!
I feel as if I can really understand her point of view with the diary layout. You write in a way that really brings her personality out. I definitely agree that this seems like she has a much more adult mindset and I think adding some lusty details might be interesting. I feel like since you wanted to portray her as a diva, you could really portray her a little bit more fierce in her desires for Hades and a not so boring life. I definitely felt the sass in her personality though!
Overall very good! I am looking forward to reading more and I will definitely come back to visit your next stories!
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ReplyDeleteYour introduction was amazing! You have such strong voice and flow in it, I really felt as though I was listening to Persephone. What I really love about it the underlying emotions of Persephone you have captured. She is tired of people, and other gods, not understanding her and just completely not getting it. It seems as though someone pushed her a little too far and she is speaking out. I always find memoir ideas like this to be so powerful because the person is telling it how it is, at least from their perspective, and we really never give people the benefit of the doubt because of what we believe they should feel and do and want. The diary style in your first story is excellent for breaking up the stories so they do not drone on. I especially like how the diary entries were not done consecutively, this makes it so much more realistic to life because no one actually writes in a diary, or journal, every single day. I found this story to be so incredibly cute. It was very cute and hilarious. Something I find to be very important in stories like this are the little unimportant details that happen in our everyday lives, like eating a pomegranate. Great work on these stories!
Hi Jessica!
ReplyDeleteThis storybook has a very similar theme to mine so it was great to see what someone else was doing about the same project! I really like the picture you used for your home page! It looks like Persephone is in distress, but that makes sense she was forced to the underworld and I think this picture shows a lot of the appropriate emotions.
Moving to the introduction, wow! This took me by complete surprise because I did not expect this to be a happy story whatsoever. I think you put a very unique spin on the life of Persephone and her feelings about her situation. Now I’m really excited to read the story!
Another unique turn of events! A diary is a great way to portray the life of the storyteller/main character and I like how you started entries well before she goes to the underworld with Hades. Once again, you take a very unique stance portraying the underworld as an enjoyable place for her to live, even with great food! I suppose she is a queen though so it would make sense that she’s treated like one. I think you do a very good job of giving Persephone voice and attitude and I’m very curious to see what the next story holds!
Hey Jessica,
ReplyDeleteI just wanted to thank you for your comment on my Storybook Project! Your comment was not only flattering but extremely helpful. I am so glad you enjoyed my template and theme I chose. I have a lot of experience watching E! News and I'm pleased to know I am portraying the dialogue properly!
Thank you again!
Hey Jessica, I just wanted to say thank you for your comment on my storytelling for the first week. You were one of two people that said they liked that I added my hometown to the story. I appreciate the feedback!
ReplyDeleteI just wanted to stop by and thank you for leaving such a great comment on my portfolio post! I really appreciate that you saw that I wanted to change some things up in my version of retelling the story. I think that it is important to sometimes branch away from the original story and to make it your own. Again thanks for the great comment!
ReplyDeleteHi Jessica! I loved reading your storybook! I'm from the Epics of India class, so it was wonderful to see other types of storybook projects. Your project is really great! I love first person narratives because the author becomes someone else, and you did that really well! She is quite the dramatic queen! It was great to learn about a character I didn’t know much about. I also loved the design of your project; for mine, I used the same layout, so I'm a little biased towards it. It worked really well with your theme—it was moody and a little dark like the Underworld. One little technical suggestion for your project: maybe don’t make "god" capitalized. Usually it's only used when referring to the Christian "God", like "Allah" in Islam is often capitalized. Usually mythological gods aren't capitalized. Your introduction is powerful, and I really liked the image you chose. So powerful and beautiful! You did a really good job showing her transformation from a naive girl blocked from the world to a powerful, influential queen. Your author’s note was really helpful in illuminating the different perspectives of the story and how the versions differed from yours. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThanks Jessica, for your feedback on my story telling last week. Yes the relationship between the monkey and the shark is weird. Good luck with this semester
ReplyDeleteHi Jessica! I really liked your introduction and first story when I read them a week or two ago and your theme is very close to mine, so I thought I'd read your storybook as my free choice this week to see what the next story you added was.
ReplyDeleteThis story did an incredible job of giving Persephone emotion and character, which is a good continuation from your first story. The tale of Orpheus and Eurydice is not one I got to read during the first few weeks of class, or one I have ever heard of actually. It definitely ended differently than I expected, but was very well told. The amount of detail you give is very impressive and you placed a very clear setting into my head as I was reading.
Even though Hades isn’t a part a big part of the story you still did good to give him some emotion and character as well by providing his reactions a few different times. You also did good to continue a few themes from your introduction and first story, such as Persephone trying to displace the “rumors” that most people have about the underworld.
The picture you found for this is amazing. I often have a very hard time finding a picture that I like to go with the Greek mythology stories, but you nailed this one. I really like how this story is coming along and I am eager to see what the next story you choose is!
Hi Jessica!
ReplyDeleteI’m glad you chose to tell the story of Persephone. I find the story of Persephone and Hades to be one of the more interesting ones. I think your storybook layout and cover photo are very eye-catching and fitting for your story. The introduction did a good job of explaining what will further be explained in the story. I like how you’re going to be telling it from the point of view of Persephone so we’ll feel more connected to her. Writing in diary style really helps the audience have a peak into the mind of the narrator. The way you write it definitely makes it known that Persephone is only 14 and quite naïve still. As the diary submissions slow progress, it seems like Persephone really doesn’t know what to feel. She’s so young so she really has no idea what’s going on and what’s really going to happen. Something I think that would make her diary entries more relatable. Is if she described things more in detail. That way not only can we relate to what she’s feeling but also visual things that she’s visualizing. Other than that I really enjoyed your story. I look forward to reading more soon!
Hey Jessica,
ReplyDeleteI love love love the story of Persephone and Hades! Greek Mythology FTW! It is definitely one of my favorite stories!
I wanted to start off by commenting on your cover page. I really like the bold red color you have chosen for your background! It seems to me it is a great color for her royalty the Queen of the Underworld! Haha. I also really liked the image you included on your cover page! It really gets the tone of classic greek mythology set into your story on the first glance... nice choice!
Next, your introduction was pretty great! I loved this new perspective for Persephone. In the original story she is portrayed as this poor girl who is trapped in the underworld against her will, but you are RIGHT! She is a queen down there and I hope she likes it! Just from your introduction I can tell the sass this queen is giving off will make some great stories!
Your first story was super! My heart-strings really started pulling for Persephone when I found out she was going to have to go back to the underworld, but I feel better now that she realizes that it is not all that bad. I feel bad for her situation though. I think you did a really great job retelling this story!
Keep up the good work!
So I chose your storybook to read for my free choice. I read your intro and first story a while ago and I really liked it! I am very glad I decided to go back and read yours again! I really like your idea of telling what the Underworld is really like based on Persephone's point of view. It makes things seem more real!
ReplyDeleteOne thing I noticed, and I have no idea whether or not you did this on purpose but I definitely enjoyed it, was that in the second story, you did not use a diary format. I like this because it makes me feel like Persephone has grown up since we first read what she was going through. Also how you wrote her opinions and recounting of the story gives me a visual of a much more mature, grown up queen. Not a love-struck child. I love your story and I can't wait to come back and read more!
The colors, text, and image of your cover page blend really well together. I have come across some tales of Persephone while researching Greek mythology for storybook possibilities. The most that I know is how she was stolen, by Hades, from her mother and I am excited begin reading your project to learn more!
ReplyDeleteThe perspective that you present through Persephone is one that most do not expect, and I enjoyed this component a lot! I like her personality and how she is sure of what she wants, despite what her mother wishes for her. I have always liked the diary style of writing since it gives readers more insight on the narrators emotions and thoughts.
Wow, I did not know that Winter time was inspired by the abduction of Persephone (per the Romans/Greeks of course)! I like how in your story she is open to new beginnings and experiences. I do feel bad for Demeter, but she can almost blame herself for hiding away her daughter in solitude. I did learn some new facts in your author's note, and I think it is interesting that Persephone spends two thirds of her time away from her husband. Good job on your project so far, I cannot wait to return to read more of your work!
Hi Jessica!
ReplyDeleteWow I really like the theme for your storybook! I thought that the color scheme of your format and the picture on your cover page work really well with the theme. Your intro was very powerful which I liked! It kept me interested and wanting to know what was next. I loved that for your first story you did the diary style of writing. I have not read a storybook or portfolio with that style thus far. I think thats a fun way to do it because it is like little mini stories that you can read very easily and there is not too much extra bulk within the story. It was also nice to read a story from the main character's point of view for once because that is not usually the case. I love greek mythology which is why I took this class so I am glad that I am finally reading a storybook about that as well. I did not know any stories, prior to this storybook, about Hades or Persephone. So that was nice for me because I love learning about all of the gods and goddesses. You did a really great job with this and I think your finished project is going to be awesome! I can't wait to see how it turns out in the end. Good luck!
Hi Jessica!
ReplyDeleteI really like how you added the personality to Persephone (Try saying that 5x and fast, haha). You gave her a bit of sass and royal snooty-ness. I found it quite humorous. Your introduction is good. It is interesting and draws readers in. I noticed in your third paragraph a small grammatical error. Instead of “myown,” it should be “my own.”
For your first story, I would suggest instead of marking each diary with Day 1, Day 7, etc. to change it to actual dates like November 1, November 7, etc. I think that would add a nice touch to your story. Other than that, it is a great story. You made a smart choice in having the abduction of Persephone in your first story because I’m not sure if everyone knows the story of Persephone.
After reading your first story, an idea came to mind. What if your introduction was kind of like a “My Cribs” episode off of MTV? Like Persephone is showing off her home in the Underworld. Maybe her diary could be somewhere in her room. Then since your second story is about Orpheus, it could be when readers move to her throne room. It is just a thought that came to my head that I wanted to mention to you. Great work on your storybook! Keep it up!
Jessica, I’ve enjoyed your storybook so far, so I’m back again this week!
ReplyDeleteThis was a perfect choice for your storybook. Personally, I’ve never heard this myth but the way it fit into your theme was great. Once again, you did a great job giving Persephone character and a strong voice throughout the story and seeing your storybook come together week by week has been fun. The Greek myths definitely have a healthy amount of strange things that happen, including incest. Most of Zeus’s children come from rape so anything is possible and I bet your hunch about the love for Adonis being desire rather than maternal is probably correct.
I think the thing you did best while retelling this story is showing the increasing amount of care Persephone has for Adonis after she discovers him. In the beginning she mentions how she isn’t exactly the motherly type and by the end she is obsessed with the child and you show that transformation very well through your writing.
It definitely seems like the gods do nothing but quarrel with each other and pass their dirty work onto someone else! I also found it interesting that Persephone seems to “move on” pretty easily after the decision by Zeus. She has grown attached to Adonis and now only gets to see him a third of the time, maybe Persephone is just that cold!
Hey Jessica! I decided I would come and check out your story again! You have added two stories since I last read so I am really looking forward to see what you have done with it!
ReplyDeleteFirst off, I really enjoy the new picture you have for your introduction. It is definitely more visually appealing than the original picture.
I really liked your second story "Favor for Orpheus." I love how you make the reader realize that Persephone has seen her fair share of souls in the Underworld. A person would have to be pretty special to be remembered in that place. Describing Eurydice as "distraught, confused and looking spooked, which is how most people come to the Underworld" was brilliant. I like how you described not only Eurydice, but most souls that come into the Underworld. All of those feelings are definitely understandable considering you are dead. I guess you need time to mourn your own death. I really feel bad for Orpheus in the end. He went through all that trouble and his curiosity really gets the best of him. I think this story is great because you really get to see the way that Queen Persephone ruled the Underworld in the beginning of her reign.
I love that Persephone got the chance to be motherly. I had honestly never heard of Adonis's story before I read this and am really intrigued by it. I would like to believe that Persephone loved Adonis based off of more than just his looks. She doesn't seem that vain. I really do not understand why Zeus would like to spend 1/3 of the year with him. Maybe I would get a better grasp on that if I read the original story.
Good job so far Jessica! I am really looking forward to seeing how your storybook will end up.
Hi, Jessica! I chose your storybook for my extra this week. I love Greek mythology. I’m doing some Greek myths for my storybook as well and Demeter and Persephone are going to be part of my fourth story. I love the theme you chose. It’s very fitting for the storybook’s concept.
ReplyDeleteYour introduction is great. It’s very well written and it really drew me in to continue reading. Your introduction also sets up the rest of your storybook well. I love the idea of Persephone narrating the stories. The picture on your introduction is perfect.
I like how you worked the short diary entries for the first story. They really encompass the wide range of emotions that Persephone goes through as her life changes again and again. I also liked how you kept the ending hopeful for her future. That was a good transition into the next story.
The second story was also great. I loved the narrative. You did a great job with description. I could really picture the scene and Persephone’s emotions really showed. I liked the background you gave, like her being younger and less used to ruling, which is why she tried to make an exception.
I don’t think I’d heard the third story before. I liked the emphasis you put on the child’s beauty. It really showed that while Aphrodite and Persephone perhaps did care for the child, it was more infatuation than real maternal love. I’m glad you kept your story as maternal love instead of romantic love, as your author’s note said some stories seemed to insinuate. There was only one typo I saw in this story. In the second line, I think you need “placed IN my care by Aphrodite.” Great job! I look forward to seeing how your storybook ends!
You do a great job giving Persephone a really strong and distinctive voice. I especially liked your introduction and how you establish Persephone as somewhat of an apologist for Hades and the Underworld, saying things like how the King of the Underworld only “brings light to the dark in everyone.” Her viewpoint on the idea of embracing one’s dark side supplies a very morally grey vibe to her character, which I think is really cool.
ReplyDeleteI also like how you’ve established a character arc throughout the stories by showing Persephone’s transformation from a naïve girl into the powerful pragmatist and self-assured ruler that is shown in the introduction. “Favor for Orpheus” stood out to me since it shows Persephone as a younger queen who still hasn’t completely numbed her heart to the necessary degree needed to be queen of the Underworld. Thus the second story can be said to be ultimately about Persephone learning to properly distance herself from the emotions that inhibit her ability as a ruler. By the end of “Adonis My Love,” we can see that she has begun to lose some of that sentimentality since she is only sad for a short time after losing Adonis. This is really sharp and well-paced character development that to me is your storybook’s strongest point along with Persephone’s awesome narrative voice. Amazing job, Jessica!
Jessica, first off - I really like the colors and theme of your storybook! The elegant fonts and red and gold colors really set the right theme for Persephone. I also really love your introduction and the way you set up the layout to have the picture at the top and integrated into the font.
ReplyDeleteAs far as your introduction, I think you did a good job using a personal tone by telling the story from Persephone's perspective. You set up who the characters were and what the misconceptions might be which made me interested to read more into the background info and stories.
For your story, I read Adonis and I thought you told it really well! The story line was interesting and I like that you added personal elements like Persephone's emotions or internal thoughts - that was a good touch! Also, I found the maternal love to be slightly more than that (which you described in your Author's Note), which made the story kind of interesting.
The only suggestion I might make is that Ardonis' death, as well as his kind of separation from Persephone after his death in the Underworld, all happened kind of quickly. Maybe if there was a little more depth and insight into why he died, Persephone's emotions about it (because she seemed to be completely unfazed by it), or why there relationship faded. I know you kind of hit on it in the Author's Note, but it would be great to have more detail/explanation in the story.
Other than that, I think you have done great so far!
Hey Jessica! I remember having the chance to look at you storybook in it's very early stages, so I am excited that I get the opportunity this week to revisit your story and see how it has progressed! I can recall thinking that your theme was very interesting, so I am glad that I get to dive in and read through your new additions!
ReplyDeleteFor your first story I loved that you gave us a more personal look at Persephone's character. Many mythological stories only give names to their characters and leave out what type of person they are. I think that it is really neat that you gave Persephone such a strong will and less of a victim.
For your second story, I again really like Persephone's character! She may be strong willed, but she is still imperfect and subject to mistake. What makes this story great is that she chooses to take this misfortune as an opportunity to learn and grow from it!
In your final story I am very glad that you chose to get Persephone a motherly adoration of the child versus a sexual one. Like you said, stranger things have happened in myths, but I am glad you made this one far more appropriate!
Great job overall! I really enjoyed reading your work!
Hi Jessica! I decided to come back to your storybook because I was so intrigued by what I read the first time. There has certainly been a lot more work done since I last visited, so I'm very excited to read more.
ReplyDeleteLike I mentioned before, I love that you're putting a new spin on the original story of Persephone. Instead of casting her as a helpless, "damsel in distress"-type of person, you give her life and a personality. The second story, Favor for Orpheus, shows this. Here, the reader can see that Persephone is not a one-dimensional character. It is interesting to read about the progression of her personality as she spends more and more time in the Underworld: she begins as a naive child, and as she encounters death every day, her heart becomes more desensitized to the pain and grief. This doesn't necessarily completely turn her into a bad person, but you really show both sides of her in the story about Orpheus: his grief for his wife is so powerful that it affects even the queen, but she states that her "mercy was revoked" and her "generosity was wasted" simply because of a minor mistake.
You display Persephone's sweetness again with her love for Adonis. It was so touching to see her fall in love with this child, and I really appreciated that it was a motherly love rather than a romantic one. As you mentioned in this story, the relationships in Greek mythology can be a little confusing, but it was sweet to watch this kind of love.
I really enjoyed reading your updated storybook! Great job!
I have read your other stories and always love how you write! I can imagine the great Queen of the Underworld chilling in a big cushy seat, snackin' on grapes and telling her stories to ghosts to entertain herself and pass the time. The story of Persephone and Adonis is one I actually know so I really enjoyed your retelling of it! And I was laughing through a lot of it! I love stories that can make me genuinely laugh! And when Aphrodite came back for Adonis I was like OOOOOOOHHHHHH!!!!!! It's about to go down in the Underworld!!! I got very excited. :) I think you did an excellent job of retelling this story and working it into your theme. Wonderful job! At some point I will come back and read the rest of yours!
ReplyDeleteAlso, I forgot to mention, I always really like the pictures you use in your stories. I know you said that the Adonis one was the best you could do, but I really like it and think it works quite well! I also don't remember the part where Adonis was locked in the chest, but it has also been a while since I read this story. Again, wonderful job and I can't wait to have time to come back and read the rest!
ReplyDelete"The first time I saw her I hated her immediately." Great, now I am laughing too hard to read the rest of the story... I just love how you write Persephone! I get such a great sense of her character and it is so consistent. I love sassy characters so much. Probably because I can relate with them so well... I am also really impressed with how well you transformed your story. I haven't read the original and so I totally thought that the dinner part was something from the original story. Again, I just love how you write your characters! Hades doesn't seem like such a horrible guy. Just one that is actually run by his wife, which I find hilarious. The God of the Underworld is not really in charge, but his dearly beloved wife. I really loved following your storybook this semester and I wish you the best of luck in your next semester!
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ReplyDeleteThank you for your comment regarding my storybook. I'm glad you enjoyed the theme I followed throughout my storybook. Thanks for the encouragement!